Electronia - Ch2 |NTR|NTS|AI

Hi. Liked the second chapter, it keeps the groove from the first. Overall, it's cool, but there are some things I'd like to point out:

The main detractors in this game are still, in my opinion, the lack of a proofreader and the limitations on art (the background of the inner bar, were those guys wearing medieval clothing?). I also need to point out that the gym is called Electronia, the main girl is called Elec, and their (best?) friend is called Tronia; I'd recommend spending some time thinking about what kind of characters do you want them to be and find names that are typically associated with such - just as an example, I'd change Elec's name for a celebrity with the reputation of cheating (not only in relations, but any kind of cheating, as in games for instance), and Tronia's name with that of a thief (because she wants to "steal" Aron, get it?). But that's just my opinion.

This being your first game, I can understand if you're not ready to start branching yet, but I'd really like for the player to have the option of going with Tronia or staying to watch Elec at the bar. Actually, IIRC, didn't the player used to have the option in the gym for deciding whether Elec being hit upon or wearing more revealing clothes? Any way, it's cool if you're going for a linear experience.

At the end, when they leave the bar, the missing bouncer at the door was a bit of a downer, as I had been curious whether Tronia would tease the guy, give him her number and/or her panties, or something else; instead, nothing happened, and if that was your intention then it's cool.

I can't recall where, exactly, but there was a part when one of them mentions playing something, and I thought that was a great opportunity for a little self-publicity, maybe with a teaser for a future game? ;-P

Also, as a minor nitpick, although it's up to each player an estimate of how much time Aron and Tronia left Elec alone, it's a bit weird, maybe, that when they came back from their fun at the back (pun intended!), they found the missing girl in the backroom serving a rando and complaining that he didn't last long. In the next chapter, will there be another scene where Elec confesses to Aron everything she was up to? And what were her feelings for being left alone with a stranger back at the bar when they decided to have some fun? Between getting hot having some dude rub himself against her can be distracting, was she ok with her company just leaving like that? How deep you want to go with your game is entirely up to you, and I'm not really complaining, but there is a lot of room being left behind to further develop your characters. If you want to, that is. Frankly, I imagine most people who download the games with the Adult tag, are looking for a simpler, more graphic, experience, but to each their own.

As with my previous comment, this is just feedback from a player who's enjoying your game and is interested to see where it will go. No offence or disrespect is meant.

Cheers!